This poem is wonderful. The cadence reminds one of the motion and feel of swimming underwater, sweeping, dreamy and fluid. The impression of your words and structure can also lead to breaking through - the barrier of surface to immersion - the barrier of being lost to letting go - the barrier of carrying on and doing good. I was expecting something more dark about 9/11 today, but this is so much better - transformative for us to commemorate by taking what has happened and “learning to see underwater”. Thank you.
That's EXACTLY what I wanted. One deep breath, paddling through the thickness of the fluid before finally finding breath again. I am so NOT surprised, but so pleasantly thrilled, you found this.
This poem is wonderful. The cadence reminds one of the motion and feel of swimming underwater, sweeping, dreamy and fluid. The impression of your words and structure can also lead to breaking through - the barrier of surface to immersion - the barrier of being lost to letting go - the barrier of carrying on and doing good. I was expecting something more dark about 9/11 today, but this is so much better - transformative for us to commemorate by taking what has happened and “learning to see underwater”. Thank you.
That's EXACTLY what I wanted. One deep breath, paddling through the thickness of the fluid before finally finding breath again. I am so NOT surprised, but so pleasantly thrilled, you found this.
Are the words borrowed? I would beg to differ ... they are given. A gift. To you and the world.
This is beautiful, and lonely, and right. Thank you.
I like this. GIven. Gifted to me to gift to others. :)